- What was your final thesis statement? Paste, then analyze its strengths & weaknesses
The use of social media creates a warped sense of how communication works by encouraging our ability to send a snapchat but decreasing our ability to hold a conversation.
I think that my thesis statement was pretty decent, it was specific but maybe it could have been more eased into my essay because as you read it in my intro it kind of seems dropped in.
- In a separate paragraph, describe what you learned or were reminded of about your own writing process, from completing Paper #1.
I learned that it definitely takes me a bit to start but once I start I can get things done. Something that I found helpful while writing this essay was having all my quotes picked out first and then having them instead of finding them as I went. I also know that I do like to make revisions and I almost always save the conclusion for last.
- In another paragraph: Which aspect of revision did you focus on most during your revisions? What changes or adjustments made your essay stronger? Be specific.
I am not the best with spelling and grammar while typing so a big thing I try to look for is spelling and punctuation mistakes. In this essay specifically mine was a little long so at the end I looked for extra sentences and words I could take out. I think that taking out some of the filler words/sentences can make the point in an essay stronger.
- In another paragraph: How might you approach Paper #2 differently, from pre-reading and annotating, all the way through completion of your final draft?
When approaching paper 2, I think I’d try to make sure that I’m making annotations of quotes that could help me. I would also maybe go to a teacher or Sassy and have them re-read and help me with my essay. I didn’t do that with this past one even though I said that I would. Otherwise though there isn’t too much I would do differently, I’m pretty content with the approach I took to writing this first essay.
